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by peachnewt

If soft vore or m/m is not your thing, leave now.  These characters are my own creation.  Do not steal or copy.  

Over the course of the next week, Watch Two kept a sharp ear and eye out for any other Freewill factions.  None showed up.  Whatever the cult group had been planning, it had gone to dust with Watch Two's interference.  Cetz breathed a sigh of relief and then had staff carry on as usual.  There was still much equipment to go through.  And there were daily trips back to the compound, each van coming back with a fill load.  

On the third floor, it could have been a repeat of the scene from a week ago.  Louis came into the Watch, grumbling under his breath about traffic and idiots on the road.  His eyes, hidden behind a pair of lightly tinted grey sunglasses, were dark, wanting to snap like a whip at anyone who looked at him oddly.  Then he saw William standing next to his desk with a large mug of steaming coffee, and a quiet smile on his face.  Louis paused, his eyes narrowed.  

The surrounding agents expected another shouting match, and tensed for the onslaught.

Louis took the mug.  "Thanks," he mumbled.  

"You're welcome," chirped William before going back to his desk.  

The blonde agent settled down with his coffee, noting the whispers amongst the rest of the agents, but saying nothing.  His smile was hidden behind the lip of the coffee mug as he took a sip.  He had meeting with Rachel in the afternoon; another one of her infuriating checkups that had started a week ago.  But it didn't seem so bad now that he had his coffee.  

It wasn't until the coffee was finished that he saw the design on the other side of the mug.  


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William pinned an online newspaper article he had printed out onto the corkboard in the office area.  He stepped back with pride.  

"One less evil in the world."

"WILL!" Louis roared as he stomped towards him, the offending mug in hand.  ""Kiss me I'm cranky"?!"

"Oh, I thought you'd never ask!" replied William before yelping and running down the hall.  Louis followed close behind, yelling obscenities and waving the mug as if to use it as a deadly projectile.  

Reese shook his head as he watched the two run out the office area.  "Like Roadrunner and Coyote."  

"Meep meep, thpppppt!" said Beni.   

She looked at the page William had pinned.  

"Downtown Deli Closed by Mass Food Poisoning"

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William took part of his lunchtime off for his daily visit with Massaru, who was still recovering from his wounds.  The healing was slow, but the Indian doctor took it with great patience and a smile.  He seemed to the exception to the rule that doctors made the worse patients.  Massaru waved Will in with a grin after a nurse set down his meal tray and the two continued their conversation from the day before.  William had a homemade sandwich, not chicken salad, while Massaru had pasta.  They switched desserts, sharing a pudding and homemade brownie.  

"How long has it been since you've seen your son?" asked William.  

"A little more than a year.  He would be in his last year of college by now.  The memory of him and my wife were one of the few things that kept me going while under Freewill."  

"Do you know where he is?"

"With his mother I suppose.  Last thing I heard from her was that he was getting serious about a girl."  

"How serious?"  

"On the edge of asking permission for her hand in marriage from her parents.  Old fashioned, yes, but a bit of a tradition amongst us Devis," said Massaru with a smile.  "But that was almost six months ago.  For all I know he's already married."  

"Maybe some small Devis on the way?"  

"Maybe.  Speaking of relationships… I heard from the nurse about that mug you gave Louis.  You know I warned you against that."  

William grinned around his spoonful of pudding.  "I know.  But seeing the look on his face was priceless."  

"You enjoy antagonizing him, looking like a… "idiot fanboy" as he calls it.  Why?"  

William shrugged.  "He's in need of something to trigger that temper of his before it grows too big.  Maybe if I can get under that I can reach his sense of humor."  

"You think he has one?"  

"I've heard him laugh before.  He can do it again.  And I… you know how in grade school, boys would tug on girl's hair or push them.  It was their way of saying "I like you".  I think me and Louis are kind of like that, I tease him because I care about him."  

Before long William's lunchtime was up.  He lingered at the doorway.  

"If you want I can look up your family and see where you son is.  The databases are massive; if there's any way of finding out what he's doing the Watch can do it."  

The doctor smiled.  "I would be grateful."  


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Cetz and Rachel were the only other ones in the testing area of the Medical lab.  It was a dimmed to half light, and the BT-10 scanner was humming away when Louis entered.  

"The lab rat has arrived," he growled.  "What kind of torture have you got for me today?"  

"Strength testing," replied Rachel indifferently as she checked something off on her clipboard.  "And then seeing your reactions with different types of light."  

"Great," drawled Louis as he took his shades off, his eyes squinting at the brightness of the lab.  He sat on a table and Cetz stood next to him, his voice low.   

"You still don't want to tell Will how you really got back to normal?"

"Normal?"  Louis stared hard at the florescent lighting and his stature suddenly shrunk to below three inches, making him barely a toy on the table.  "You call this normal?"

Having seen Louis shrink dozens of times before, Cetz was not phased.  "Don't change the subject.  You'll have to tell him someday."

"Yeah… someday, when the information is needed, not before.  We still don't know if this is permanent or if it will fade away."  

Cetz shrugged and went back to helping Rachel set up her equipment.  Louis, alone on the wide plane of the table, felt isolated.  He rubbed his eyes.  

*How long can I keep this from Will?*


---Man on the Inside END
Man on the Inside Part 12 Epilogue

The aftermath of the Freewill mission. Will has lunch with Doctor Devi, and the reason's behind Louis's medical exams are explained.

Yeah, y'all are gonna hate me for this. But I'm going to leave the story like this; open-ended, capable of so much more... but that's it.

This is not the end of me writing about Will and Louis. I hope one day to come back to these characters. I have SO many ideas for them, and I've already hinted at trials and tribulations in their near future. It would be crazy to leave these guys hanging. But that's it. FOR NOW. ^_^

Until I can get my time together to write more, please enjoy the chapters I have posted.

First Part 1: [link]

Previous Part 11: [link]

EDIT - Next story Under My Skin : [link]
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Izzika Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2014
How did I get to the weird side of Deviantart? 
Well, I stumbled across this by accident, but was interested enough in the synopsis to find out what it was all about.  I'm not into M/M romance (Broships/friendships, yes.), but I am really shocked at how much I enjoyed this story.  It was intriguing, interesting, had a well thought out plot line, and was cringe-worthy at times since I have a little fear of this subject myself (my first nightmare in life at age 3 was of being eaten by a shark.   I've been kind of interested in this sort of thing ever since, possibly to try to make sense of where that nightmare came from.)  I like this type of 'swallowed whole' story rather than a predatorial, carnal horror.  I even wrote my own story like this recently to see if I could do it, and how well it could be done. 

Anyway, I like your writing style.  I felt pulled into the characters, the descriptions, and was 'watching' rather than 'reading' the story.  You gave this scenario so much meaning and depth.  You added compelling plot twists, meaning, science married to fantasy, and emotion.  The characters grew with the story, and I found myself rooting for the good guys.  This sort of tale can be written, yes, but written WELL, *heh*  not all writers have that ability to take a subject such as this and turn it into an engrossing tale.  You bring your readers into a world you've caringly developed.  Congrats.  You've done it. 

I'm glad I paused to read.  Turns out I've found a good story.  :)
On to the sequel, because the way you ended this left me wanting more.
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peachnewt Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I don't know how you got to the weird side, but I'm glad you stopped by for a visit!  ^_^ 

I'm glad you enjoyed the story.  (and don't worry about the fear, I still get chills from watching Jaws and being eaten by the critters from 'Aliens') 

If you think this story is compelling, I entreat you to check out the WIP rewrite of Man on the Inside.  A lot more world building and character development to be found.   archiveofourown.org/works/1190…

Enjoy the sequel! 
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Izzika Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2014
Hey. :) 

Sorry this took a month to reply.  I had some real world stuff wedge into my computer life. 
I'm reading it now. :) 
I wrote a story like this for my Persona 4 fic, but only my friends have seen it and the art I did to go with it.  I'm too nervous to put it up online.  Did you get any kind of judgement from your story, or is the community here pretty accepting? 
I worked for a month and a half on this side story, but I'm too scared to show it to the public even though I'm proud of it, basically. 
And a happy reading to your story, I shall go!  You are an amazing writer.
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peachnewt Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I didn't get any extremely negative comments when I first put up my story, but I think that was mostly because I was under everyone's radar.  Original fiction doesn't get as many hits as fanfiction. 

The vore community in general is very accepting, spats between types of vore non-withstanding.  I'd say go ahead and post it!  You worked hard on your fic, and if you enjoyed it then someone out there will enjoy it just as much. 

Thanks for the compliment!  ^_^
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Tallstar27 Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2014
LOVE IT!!! and reading next story now so far so good.
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peachnewt Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yay!  Glad you like it so far!  ^_^ 
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Tallstar27 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014
:) (Smile) Love Love Love Love :D (Big Grin) :D (Big Grin) :D (Big Grin) :D (Big Grin) =P (Razz) 
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Shurtugalskulblaka Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Great story :)
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peachnewt Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!  ^_^
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Shurtugalskulblaka Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Can't wait to read the others :)
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peachnewt Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hope you like them!  "Under My Skin" is next, and then a short story afterwards.  ^_^
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Greennyy Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013
hmm... love the story, the whole thing was awesome...

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peachnewt Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Glad you liked it!  Hope the sequel also pleases you.  ^_^
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Amenarae Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Pfft. Funneh chapter~ X3
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peachnewt Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Gotta end on a high note somewhere.  ^_^
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Amenarae Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
True~ And you did it well~
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narutosuperfan456 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist
He's not cured.....SEEEEEEEEEEEEEQUEEEEEEEEEEEEL :excited: Joy Love Emote :happy: JoyFrontflip  !!!!!!!!!
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peachnewt Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Heck yes!
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Midgetninja001 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013
Well, guess what I just finished reading?
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peachnewt Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm guessing you just finished Man on the Inside. Hope you enjoyed it. ^_^
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Midgetninja001 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013
Yes and very much so. It's very different from other vore stories I've seen, but I really like it.
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avatarpanda Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I spasmed with joy and smashed a vase when I realised there was sequel. =D
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peachnewt Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
*brings out the broom and dustbin for the vase* You're cleaning that up.

Hope you enjoy the sequel! ^_^
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DarkWisp88 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Student Digital Artist
AAAAAAAND I CANT SLEEP NOW. great....now i godda know and i wanna keep reeeeeading!! GAAAH....ugh....well, despite me wanting to beat someone over the head with a stop sign because i cant handle not knowing...i loved this. its just...TOO good...akljdhsfkljadf way too good and im TOTALLY going to read the sequel 'Under My Skin'....THERE BETTER BE ANSWERS THERE! XDDD ugh im so fangirling its insane...

oh......and...*small voice* >///< IM SORRY I KEEP COMMENTING....i needa stap...but i feel like im going to explode if i dont...ahahaha....SORRY. i shall resist bombarding you with comments for the next series....^^;
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peachnewt Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
There will be a few answers there, but enough questions to keep you going for the rest of the series.

Never apologize for commenting. I'm happy to answer any questions you have. ^_^
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DarkWisp88 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013  Student Digital Artist
well, i totally WILL go through the rest of the series~ its one of my favourites already~!!!

>.> ok~ and you know, Louis reminds me of Shizuo Heiwajima from Durarara....XDDD
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staticfan101 Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012
2:30 in the morning is NOT a good time to try not to burst into laughter. :iconlaughingplz: expecially when your parents (who are light sleepers) are sleeping in the next room over. And them knowing nothing about my liking of vore or what vore even is, would probably have a mini freakout session if they saw what I was reading.
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peachnewt Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Over the last year I've become very adept at laughing silently at night. Such is the life of one who watches too many SPN bloopers on tumblr. ^_^

Yet if you laugh, I feel it's a job well done on my part.
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Tuiteyfruity Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I feel you! I did the same thing, sleep? or read!? I chose read...
Me personally, I would try to get my parents to read this, if they weren't all prejudice towards reading things online! "It's not the same thing as a book!" they tell me! the fools!
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Tuiteyfruity Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
great story, not to much fluff and plenty of action! I really love spy stories and such. I see much similarities between Luis and my spy Leto. except for Luis doesn't strike me as racist. But she does have to deal with a sorta rookie (or at least a guy who acts like one)

my only problems were with the technology aspect. I have this thing with Shrinking by science. it is just not possible to shrink someone and have them still be whole. not unless you gave them some sort of clothing that isolated space time around them to make it larger within the small space therefore shrinking them, then it would all depend on how long space time can be manipulated. if this isnt done a few things could happen.

if they are condensing the atoms: the person remains the same weight and thus mass, if for some reason the atoms are stable in the first place, the electrons would repel each other.

if they are condensing but at the same time vaporizing the right atoms from the right places: the person will be left with the mentality of a hamster.

and how he keeps shrinking, that really makes no sense at all, no way I could ever reason that out.

however, even thought I dont want to go against my no-science-shrinking-unless-it-is-done-right policy, I would like this story for my GT group :icongt-adventures: it will either go under science fiction lit or fluff
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peachnewt Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I do like a lot of action and plot in my stories. Let's hope I can keep it up!

It's kind of hard to have a "shrinking-done-right" story because shrinking is impossible in reality, as is vore. Hence it being Fiction. But I try my best with the concepts I can come up with. The series deals more with the relationship between Louis and Will than it does with the science.

My idea was comparing "particles" of light to particles matter. Light, at least to me, doesn't seem to have mass but it can be dispersed or condensed. Like how you can put a candle in a big room and the light will be very weak, but put it in a tiny room and the light fills it better. Or, you can use the same amount of energy to turn on two different kind of bulbs, one that shines bright and the other that shines dim.

To stretch the metaphor, what matters in Louis' shrinking is the energy used to turn on the light bulb. The sudden transformation or "condensing" done by Louis is triggered by sudden, or long period exposure to light. His molecular structure is changed from a high brightness light bulb to a low brightness one.

Then again you're talking to a girl that didn't do very well in her science classes and probably shouldn't be talking scientific theory. I work in turns of phrase and metaphors, not equations. I expect readers to suspend disbelief for a little while to enjoy the story. ^_^

If you want GT and tinies with a little more science I'd recommend the Scavenger series by :iconliamslostangel: Not only do you get shrinking but the science also deals with the cons of sudden growth into a giant. Basically a giant in this story is far more vulnerable to injury because the molecules are spread apart.

If you want the series in your group go ahead and send a request.
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Tuiteyfruity Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
of course shrinking is impossible, growing is more possible (because that involves making chemicals that disrupt hormones and other chemicals that tell the body to stop growing, which can initiate growing as well)
but if vore is just one thing eating another, it is possible because it is the natural world around us.
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kaimukiwahine Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
I love this story! It was really well written and I didn't stop reading till I got to the end! And it all started with the picture for Ch. 7 I saw on one of the dA groups. ^^;
Now I will continue on to the next story! :)
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peachnewt Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Why thank you! If it kept you reading to the end, then I did something right. I hope the next story is just as riveting. Just make sure you leave aside a few hours to sleep. ^_^
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kaimukiwahine Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
I'm half way done with the second one. xD
Nah, no need sleep. It's only 8pm and my summer ends next week. But understood; don't want to get the dark circles on my eyes like Louis. :)

I hope you keep writing! I love your work!
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peachnewt Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Louis *drinking coffee* : Only the truly enlightened know the badge of honor that are shadows under the eyes.

Will *frowning* : Don't listen to him, you'll only end up as dependent on coffee as he is.

Louis: And what about your dependance on tea?

Will: I'm not an addict. In fact, cool, wet teabags over the eyes can reduce puffy eyes and discoloration. I have a few extra if you're interested.

Louis: ...did you just offer to "tea-bag" me?

Reese *walking by, suddenly stops and looks askance at Will*

Will: No! *turns to Reese* It's not what you think! I-- Gah! Why do I even try?

Will walks away frustrated and defeated.

Reese: Did I miss something?

Louis laughs with an evil grin, finishing his coffee.
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kaimukiwahine Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2012
Haha! "cool, wet teabags" ... awkward~! >//.//<
I think I already have a slight trace of dark circles on my eyes already.
Too many overnighters from my arch projects over the past three years. Strangely I run just fine without coffee. ^^;
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Luna-Tiny Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2012
This... was an epic story. :D I loved everything about it... but the end is a BIT... odd...? You SHOULD post more... XD Not just because I wanna know what happens, just because. :I
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peachnewt Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
What in particular was odd about it? I'll have to do a full edit of this in the future so any suggestions you have would be very helpful. To quick a resolution? Ended on a weird note?

And I have continued the series. I couldn't stop with just one book. ^_^ Up in the description is the link to the next book in the, Under My Skin. Longer than the first book, but with a lot more twists and action. Check it out and tell me what you think! ^_^
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Luna-Tiny Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2012
Yeah, I realize now. ^^" Let's see... I'm up to part 31 now, and I just started reading them today.

When I said 'odd,' it's not that it was bad in any way. Just curious as to what some stuff was- 'the animal'- and was wanting more. But now some questions are answered. I really REALLY like what I've read so far! And I hope Louis finally admits he likes Will. They're so CUTE! XD
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peachnewt Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, you're a fast reader. Glad you're liking the series so far, and you'll find out about the "animal organism" in the third book. ^_^
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darkstarwulf Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2011
wow I got to read this all because of a Llama sticker! I love the story! It is cute and really holds on to you! You have a masterful way of depicting a scene! I love it! <3 Do not know who I love more Will or Louis...hmmm I just love them! I was so in to the story awesome job!
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peachnewt Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad you like it! Thank you for the :+fav: and the devWatch! I hope you enjoy the rest of the series.

I can't decide who I like better either, Will is so much fun and Louis is such a grouch it's easy to make fun of him. ^_^
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darkstarwulf Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011
I only add the best ;P I think I am getting to like Will more. He is humorous and cute. But Louis is so closed off and grouchy, and is cute too...ugh nope still a stand still XD
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peachnewt Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Well, who would you like better; the guy with coffee creamer explosives and two light-sabers in his Fanboy collection, or the former soldier with a mental map of every coffee place in the tri-state area? ^_^
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darkstarwulf Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2011
Will would be fun to be around lol. Yeah definitely Will, but Louis is so serious and that makes him cute >u< and Will is so caring and just wants to be with him. Silly grumpy coffee lover!
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peachnewt Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Louis: Idiot tea lover. >_<

Will: Loves you too.

Louis: Zip it.
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poiikil Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2011
Hi.

Uhm... I just wanted to let you know, that... I really love this story. I think you should elaborate on it more and make it a novel. And I would buy 50 copies. XD

My brain is shot right now, and my stomach hurts, (IT'S YOUR FAULT.) so I can't really make a coherent comment. OTL
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peachnewt Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I'm happy you like the story so much. ^_^ As for making it a novel... well, I am playing around with some rewrites. It's already 27,000 words long, which puts it in novella territory. But even if I add the scenes I'm thinking of, it won't go beyond 32,000 words. That being said I do have hopes to put the series to print; but not for a long time. I'm glad you would be willing to buy one copy, let alone 50. ^_^

I hope your stomach pains are from laughter. ^_^ And if the ending to this chapter makes you laugh, wait until you get to the conclusion of Under My Skin. ^_^
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poiikil Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2011
It's no problem~ I love the characters, the plot, the subtle romance~ <3

Hmm... If you add more scenes and give more elaborate details (People just eat that stuff up, no pun intended.) It's gotta get big enough, but I don't really know much about the writing and publishing process... D:

Haha, partially. XD I'm at the end of 22 right now, I've been reading non stop since yesterday.
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