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by peachnewt

If soft vore or m/m is not your thing, leave now.  These characters are my own creation.  Do not steal or copy.  

Over the course of the next week, Watch Two kept a sharp ear and eye out for any other Freewill factions.  None showed up.  Whatever the cult group had been planning, it had gone to dust with Watch Two's interference.  Cetz breathed a sigh of relief and then had staff carry on as usual.  There was still much equipment to go through.  And there were daily trips back to the compound, each van coming back with a fill load.  

On the third floor, it could have been a repeat of the scene from a week ago.  Louis came into the Watch, grumbling under his breath about traffic and idiots on the road.  His eyes, hidden behind a pair of lightly tinted grey sunglasses, were dark, wanting to snap like a whip at anyone who looked at him oddly.  Then he saw William standing next to his desk with a large mug of steaming coffee, and a quiet smile on his face.  Louis paused, his eyes narrowed.  

The surrounding agents expected another shouting match, and tensed for the onslaught.

Louis took the mug.  "Thanks," he mumbled.  

"You're welcome," chirped William before going back to his desk.  

The blonde agent settled down with his coffee, noting the whispers amongst the rest of the agents, but saying nothing.  His smile was hidden behind the lip of the coffee mug as he took a sip.  He had meeting with Rachel in the afternoon; another one of her infuriating checkups that had started a week ago.  But it didn't seem so bad now that he had his coffee.  

It wasn't until the coffee was finished that he saw the design on the other side of the mug.  


William pinned an online newspaper article he had printed out onto the corkboard in the office area.  He stepped back with pride.  

"One less evil in the world."

"WILL!" Louis roared as he stomped towards him, the offending mug in hand.  ""Kiss me I'm cranky"?!"

"Oh, I thought you'd never ask!" replied William before yelping and running down the hall.  Louis followed close behind, yelling obscenities and waving the mug as if to use it as a deadly projectile.  

Reese shook his head as he watched the two run out the office area.  "Like Roadrunner and Coyote."  

"Meep meep, thpppppt!" said Beni.   

She looked at the page William had pinned.  

"Downtown Deli Closed by Mass Food Poisoning"


William took part of his lunchtime off for his daily visit with Massaru, who was still recovering from his wounds.  The healing was slow, but the Indian doctor took it with great patience and a smile.  He seemed to the exception to the rule that doctors made the worse patients.  Massaru waved Will in with a grin after a nurse set down his meal tray and the two continued their conversation from the day before.  William had a homemade sandwich, not chicken salad, while Massaru had pasta.  They switched desserts, sharing a pudding and homemade brownie.  

"How long has it been since you've seen your son?" asked William.  

"A little more than a year.  He would be in his last year of college by now.  The memory of him and my wife were one of the few things that kept me going while under Freewill."  

"Do you know where he is?"

"With his mother I suppose.  Last thing I heard from her was that he was getting serious about a girl."  

"How serious?"  

"On the edge of asking permission for her hand in marriage from her parents.  Old fashioned, yes, but a bit of a tradition amongst us Devis," said Massaru with a smile.  "But that was almost six months ago.  For all I know he's already married."  

"Maybe some small Devis on the way?"  

"Maybe.  Speaking of relationships… I heard from the nurse about that mug you gave Louis.  You know I warned you against that."  

William grinned around his spoonful of pudding.  "I know.  But seeing the look on his face was priceless."  

"You enjoy antagonizing him, looking like a… "idiot fanboy" as he calls it.  Why?"  

William shrugged.  "He's in need of something to trigger that temper of his before it grows too big.  Maybe if I can get under that I can reach his sense of humor."  

"You think he has one?"  

"I've heard him laugh before.  He can do it again.  And I… you know how in grade school, boys would tug on girl's hair or push them.  It was their way of saying "I like you".  I think me and Louis are kind of like that, I tease him because I care about him."  

Before long William's lunchtime was up.  He lingered at the doorway.  

"If you want I can look up your family and see where you son is.  The databases are massive; if there's any way of finding out what he's doing the Watch can do it."  

The doctor smiled.  "I would be grateful."  


Cetz and Rachel were the only other ones in the testing area of the Medical lab.  It was a dimmed to half light, and the BT-10 scanner was humming away when Louis entered.  

"The lab rat has arrived," he growled.  "What kind of torture have you got for me today?"  

"Strength testing," replied Rachel indifferently as she checked something off on her clipboard.  "And then seeing your reactions with different types of light."  

"Great," drawled Louis as he took his shades off, his eyes squinting at the brightness of the lab.  He sat on a table and Cetz stood next to him, his voice low.   

"You still don't want to tell Will how you really got back to normal?"

"Normal?"  Louis stared hard at the florescent lighting and his stature suddenly shrunk to below three inches, making him barely a toy on the table.  "You call this normal?"

Having seen Louis shrink dozens of times before, Cetz was not phased.  "Don't change the subject.  You'll have to tell him someday."

"Yeah… someday, when the information is needed, not before.  We still don't know if this is permanent or if it will fade away."  

Cetz shrugged and went back to helping Rachel set up her equipment.  Louis, alone on the wide plane of the table, felt isolated.  He rubbed his eyes.  

*How long can I keep this from Will?*

---Man on the Inside END
Man on the Inside Part 12 Epilogue

The aftermath of the Freewill mission. Will has lunch with Doctor Devi, and the reason's behind Louis's medical exams are explained.

Yeah, y'all are gonna hate me for this. But I'm going to leave the story like this; open-ended, capable of so much more... but that's it.

This is not the end of me writing about Will and Louis. I hope one day to come back to these characters. I have SO many ideas for them, and I've already hinted at trials and tribulations in their near future. It would be crazy to leave these guys hanging. But that's it. FOR NOW. ^_^

Until I can get my time together to write more, please enjoy the chapters I have posted.

First Part 1: [link]

Previous Part 11: [link]

EDIT - Next story Under My Skin : [link]
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Izzika Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2014
How did I get to the weird side of Deviantart? 
Well, I stumbled across this by accident, but was interested enough in the synopsis to find out what it was all about.  I'm not into M/M romance (Broships/friendships, yes.), but I am really shocked at how much I enjoyed this story.  It was intriguing, interesting, had a well thought out plot line, and was cringe-worthy at times since I have a little fear of this subject myself (my first nightmare in life at age 3 was of being eaten by a shark.   I've been kind of interested in this sort of thing ever since, possibly to try to make sense of where that nightmare came from.)  I like this type of 'swallowed whole' story rather than a predatorial, carnal horror.  I even wrote my own story like this recently to see if I could do it, and how well it could be done. 

Anyway, I like your writing style.  I felt pulled into the characters, the descriptions, and was 'watching' rather than 'reading' the story.  You gave this scenario so much meaning and depth.  You added compelling plot twists, meaning, science married to fantasy, and emotion.  The characters grew with the story, and I found myself rooting for the good guys.  This sort of tale can be written, yes, but written WELL, *heh*  not all writers have that ability to take a subject such as this and turn it into an engrossing tale.  You bring your readers into a world you've caringly developed.  Congrats.  You've done it. 

I'm glad I paused to read.  Turns out I've found a good story.  :)
On to the sequel, because the way you ended this left me wanting more.
peachnewt Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I don't know how you got to the weird side, but I'm glad you stopped by for a visit!  ^_^ 

I'm glad you enjoyed the story.  (and don't worry about the fear, I still get chills from watching Jaws and being eaten by the critters from 'Aliens') 

If you think this story is compelling, I entreat you to check out the WIP rewrite of Man on the Inside.  A lot more world building and character development to be found.…

Enjoy the sequel! 
Izzika Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2014
Hey. :) 

Sorry this took a month to reply.  I had some real world stuff wedge into my computer life. 
I'm reading it now. :) 
I wrote a story like this for my Persona 4 fic, but only my friends have seen it and the art I did to go with it.  I'm too nervous to put it up online.  Did you get any kind of judgement from your story, or is the community here pretty accepting? 
I worked for a month and a half on this side story, but I'm too scared to show it to the public even though I'm proud of it, basically. 
And a happy reading to your story, I shall go!  You are an amazing writer.
peachnewt Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I didn't get any extremely negative comments when I first put up my story, but I think that was mostly because I was under everyone's radar.  Original fiction doesn't get as many hits as fanfiction. 

The vore community in general is very accepting, spats between types of vore non-withstanding.  I'd say go ahead and post it!  You worked hard on your fic, and if you enjoyed it then someone out there will enjoy it just as much. 

Thanks for the compliment!  ^_^
Tallstar27 Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2014
LOVE IT!!! and reading next story now so far so good.
peachnewt Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yay!  Glad you like it so far!  ^_^ 
Tallstar27 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014
:) (Smile) Love Love Love Love :D (Big Grin) :D (Big Grin) :D (Big Grin) :D (Big Grin) =P (Razz) 
Shurtugalskulblaka Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Great story :)
peachnewt Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!  ^_^
Shurtugalskulblaka Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Can't wait to read the others :)
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